Jun. 7th, 2015

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Opened up the box yesterday afternoon for a new set of rolls, after having made my deposit earlier at noon, and noticed that I have two spare quarter rolls. Those should come in handy at some point, since quarters are what I get a lot more of from recycling than nickels.

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[Censored] has returned yesterday. After a bit of discussion with her, here are some issues I promised her I'd write regarding the Madoka fic, which I'd also like Chelle's opinion on.

To start with, Mami's debut in the first chapter will involve her having just fainted in class from dieting. Until this morning, I assumed that she didn't know before making her contract with Kyubey that she'd become fat upon becoming a Cibus. Therefore, it could not have been that long ago that she became one, and if she met any Cibi beforehand, they would be few enough (about one or two) that she'd assume they were overweight by default.

The author just cleared things up this morning, saying that either a foster family she's been living with (as opposed to on her own, something she finds unrealistic for a 14-year-old) had put her on said diet or she just hadn't been getting enough food for other reasons.

Anyway, I did mention upon commissioning her that I would like everyone's character to match that of their canon counterparts as closely as possible. I am aware, though, that the way things are set up in this story will render certain characters (such as Suzune and Kagari from Suzune Magica) very different from canon.

What I'm getting at right now, is that while I have no real issues with Mami having a foster family to live with, and while I do find a different debut from canon to be interesting, I do find it rather odd that she evidently be a newbie when she is much more experienced in canon. It's revealed in the third audio drama (which was later adapted into volume 1 of The Different Story) that she was the one to help train Kyoko in combat before meeting the others; the idea that she meet Kyoko (whom [censored] had on mind instead of Nagisa, whom I suggested beforehand) before becoming a Cibus comes off as a bit weird, although I'm not against it per se.

One thing I am against, would be changing Kyubey's motivation for making contracts with young teenage girls. From Magica Madoka Veneficus Puella, let's take a look at Torbey's entry under TV Tropes: Complete Monster: Fan Works. (Not quite an AU, but the fic has Madoka making a wish that changes the game very differently from canon.)

This time, as Kyubey's lackey, he forgoes all that which Kyubey at least attempted, from the fact that he doesn't bother to grant any wishes, to the fact that his purpose is to destroy the human population of Earth, he is more than qualified for a spot on this fine list of horrible villains.

"Kyubey" was spoiler-tagged on the actual page. Torbey is his lackey, whose purpose is to exterminate humanity.

That is one place where I draw the line as to what can change from canon.

Well, Stars Above was the only Madoka fic that I actually read more than a few chapters of, so let's take a look at a few Lucky Star AU's instead:

-Starbound: Not an AU, but it does import the three main protagonists from another anime, Mon Colle Knights. For the most part, Mondo, Rokuna, and Ichirobei are the same people that they were in MCK, even though their world and resources are very different between that and the fic. However, Mondo doesn't hit up on girls, because I don't want Rokuna hitting him due to how rarely a guy ever gets to hit a girl for laughs. Also has some different mannerisms from canon (most noticeable when he and Rokuna visit Minami's house alongside the LS mains), but that's mainly as a contrast with Miyuki's much more reserved nature from even her own friends.

-The Library trilogy: Only real differences here are with Tsukasa, who manipulates Hiyori and Konata into aiding her in a school shootout, and Kagami, Misao, and Ayano, who are three of the many bullies that Tsukasa seeks revenge upon. These are changes that I am not looking for. For the most part, though, everyone else is pretty much the same. For example, Hiyori and Patricia are still best friends (evidenced by them meeting up during Calamity Plus One), and some facts asked about regarding Konata late in C+1 still ring true, such as her favorite anime having been Haruhi. Kagami and Yutaka both have some deep qualms with Konata for having done some heinous things to survive the war that C+1 revolves around (as well as her participation in the Ryouou shootout), but that's legitimate, as is Konata's own animosity towards Tsukasa when she returns from the dead (for having manipulated her and Hiyori into helping her kill people). Miyuki, meanwhile, has become quite the sadist during the war while traveling alongside Konata and an OC named Sekine; author Arkytal chalks that up to a repressed nature of hers from when she killed a twin inside her mother's womb before birth, but I do suppose the events of the war could have conceivably allowed that to surface, as opposed to if she was still living a normal life.

-Fists of Rage: This is where I'd really like not to tread. In this version of the LS-verse, Kagami, instead of being vitriolic best buds with Konata, is the leader of over a hundred bullies who rule Ryouou High School with an iron fist, and Tsukasa and Misao are her top subordinates. (Ayano, Misao's best friend in canon, has never been mentioned so far. There is also the fact that, if I recall correctly, Konata and Miyuki have just met for the first time in the story's second chapter, but those are both minor issues.)

Basically, trying to figure out where to draw the line between what can be changed and what should remain consistent with canon. Not that I have a problem with any of the fics themselves (I'm the one behind Starbound), but the Madoka fic I'm commissioning for is one story I would like written at least mostly faithfully to canon.

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